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Steve:
Yes, I like it.  The wall isn't so flat now.

ENSONIQ5:
Really excellent work Lynn, and a great example of a good image becoming an amazing image by its creator being prepared to accept crits and apply them.  The final render, with the dark wall at left illuminated a bit more, looks much better.  Only in space are large shadowed area's fully black, because here on Earth there is almost always some secondary reflected light.  For example, the brightly lit courtyard wall and floor will be casting a secondary glow on the darker wall, and your final image captures this effect beautifully.

Although I agree fully with pretty much everyone's comments in this thread, I think the soft shadows are a little too soft.  The sun, appearing as a disc rather than a point, does indeed cast slightly soft-edged shadows, but in the bright midday sun they are still quite crisp.  Here in Australia it's currently summer, and comparing your image to the view from my window I would say the shadow cast by the baclcony onto the back wall is about 2 times too soft, for its distance from the wall.  I would adjust the settings to bring it about half way between your current settings and fully hard edged.  My only other crit would be that the ambient occlusion effect could be even further enhanced.  The space inside the building should appear almost black, and the ladder should cast a slight, very soft shadow on the wall it is leaning against (because it's light source is entirely secondary, coming from all directions).  Also, the doors still look a little plasticy.  Perhaps a stronger ambient occlusion effect (as well as door handles) might improve them somewhat.

When an image is as good as this the viewer finds themselves drawn in, studying every tiny detail, so minor things like I have mentioned above tend to be noticed.  Unfortunately, it seems the more detail you put in an image the more demanding the audience becomes!  You should be congratulated on creating an image that leaves us unable to criticise more than the tiniest of details!!

captaindrewi:
re- the the balcony, that concrete slab has reinforced steel rods in it presumably?
it could have some architectural bracket support in sympathy/style of the balcony rail.

agree with ensoniq about interior lighting
and about the nature of the viewer.


 

lynn22:
Thank you ENSONIQ5, your comments are most helpful specially summer day shadows. It's winter here so I cannot compare reality with my image ;)
Door handles are added, a sliding bolt and a knob, and the ladder is actually a support for a climbing plant so I added two slats at the back which hold it to the wall hence no shadows since it's not "leaning".

captaindrewi, the balcony is indeed reinforced concrete and it won't fall, I supervised the construction myself ;D

I guess this is the last image, my eyes are saying hello to each other from staring at the details  :D

thecolclough:
ah, warmth... where i am, it's snowing right now.  lovely to look at, especially the bits that haven't been trampled on or driven over, but it's flippin' freezing... brrrr!  on the bright side, my college is shut because noone can get in, so i've got a couple of extra days off.

thanks for the splash of sunshine, lynn!  :)

- c

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