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Familyman:
here are two little clips from somethign I am working on, tey still need a lot of work, and I mean A LOT!!,,
but I thought I would post what I ahve so far...
Thoughts and comments please..

hihosilver:
That's a nice start you have there.  I like your use of terranim8or (I assume).

So here is what I think you could do to improve this:
In the first scene, the movements are smooth and nice, but they're a bit too uniform.  Perhaps the radar should stay that way, though perhaps you also want it to rotate slower.  The turret I feel should move a bit differently.  Perhaps not just side to side, but up and down as well.  It would be nice if they didn't necessarily move in unison as well.  It's very obvious as a viewer and takes my attention away from the full scene.

As for the second scene, I feel you could speed up the spaceship a lot.  I'm not sure what exact effect you're going for, but I doubt the ship would stay flying if it was going that slow.  Next, the turning still needs a little work, but it may also be the camera.  If you set the camera to have the spaceship as its parent, it will move the same as the ship, but also remember you can stray from this so that it doesn't follow it exactly (once again, following exactly behind would look strange and unattractive to the eye.  Right now you have some good smooth camera movement, but it doesn't sync very well with the ship.)

As I said, this is a decent start.  I look forward to seeing what you can do!

thecolclough:
...hihosilver just said almost everything i was going to say...

my only other crit was, maybe it would look a bit better if you thinned down the wires on the radar dish.  i think the whole cage structure on the front of the dish looks a bit chunky at the moment, but that might just be me, being fussy :P

very good start, though :)

- colclough

ENSONIQ5:
Great work (how cool is Terranim8or, huh!).  Couple of suggestions:  Maybe it's my monitor but both the vids appear a bit washed out, too bright and not enough contrast.  Not sure why this would be, but the starfield background would look much better with higher contrast.  Also, the panoramic background seems vertically stretched (or horizontally squished).  Maybe fiddle with the background parameters, in particular the High and Low settings (which are reversed in V0.95 by the way, a minor bug.  High actually sets the bottom of the image, and Low sets the top).

Other than that, I agree with Hiho and Colclough.  It's an excellent start, and I particularly like the Flash Gordon style ship and the alien terrain.  Very cool!

Familyman:
Thanks for all the advise guys,
The ship flying through the landscape needs a lot of work, I am not happy with the first turn that the ship makes, it is very blocky, as for the camera following I will try making the ship its parent and see what that looks like, I was trying to get the feel of the veiwer following the ship not knowing which way the ship was turning so the camera isn't following exactly.

Yes Terranim8or is great, after playing around with it a few times I figured out how to make a trench exactly wher I wanted it to go and it worked perfetly.

As for the Igloo and Radar, after reading your ideas and suggestions I agree that the gun and radar shouldn't follow exactly the same line, The effect I was trying for did't work, so what i am doing now ( I will post a link later) is hving the Radar scanning moving left to right AND up and down now (thanks for the idea), then once the radar has locked on the gun turret moves and locks on to where the radar is aiming.

As for the scenes looking a littel washed is because there is a fog on the igloo scene and that is making it look thatway. I am playing with that a bit, I am wanting to give it a foggy cold wintery feel. Plus with a fog setting the Snowflake look better,, I am finding that without a fog on some frames the light seems to shine and show up the transparant edging of the snowflakes..
I didn't notice the back ground was streched or squoshed but I will change that.
Thanks again to everyone. And stayed tuned...
Glda you like what i have so far and glad you liek the ship.

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